No one remembered
what she told him
and what remained bare
between the lines.
Beneath them
The ocean swayed
the last drop of dubiety.
Two hearts, one ocean
made silent vows,
then blended,
whipping the smiling
half-moon into
froths of unresolved hopes.
**
Inspired by Yeah Write#165: The Gargleblaster challenge
Beautiful
That’s so nice to hear, Christine. Thank you very much for the prompt, visit and comment. 🙂
Thank you very much for your comment. This is one wonderfully written comment. 🙂
Gorgeous, Archita – one of my favorites of yours. The images are so clear and so tightly woven together. It all just works. Lovely. Thanks for sharing it with all of us.
The image I’m left with is lines of sand next to the nebulous ocean and a smiling moon hanging above. A beautiful piece, Archita.
That’s so nice to hear. Thank you very much for your comment and the visit. 🙂
“what remained bare / between the lines” is so sparsely clear.
So nice to see someone pointing that out. I lost my grandfather on weekend and while writing a fiction on Sunday night all my thoughts were around death, love, life and death.
Thank you for the visit and your comment.
The last lines are spectacularly sad…
Thank you very much. 🙂
lovely, poetic, beautiful…
🙂
You should!!!
Thank you very much, Meg. 🙂 One day I will surely compose music to go with these words. 🙂
I especially liked those first four lines. Lyrical.
Thank you very much, Patricia.
Thank you very much. This is such a wonderful comment. 🙂
It was powerful and poetic.
This flowed so beautifully just like the ocean swaying beneath them.
I’m glad you liked it. Thank you very much, Arka.
Thank you very much, Justine. 🙂
Thank you very much for your comment, Soumyaa. 🙂
I’m so happy to read it. Thank you for the visit and your kind words.
Thank you very much, Vishal, for the visit, comment and sharing on G+. 🙂
You definitely made me smile on this too hot California summer day. Thank you very much for the visit and comment.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Jennifer.
Thank you so much, TIZ. 🙂
So glad to hear that. Thank you very much for your beautiful comment.
Thanks a lot, Stacie.
Thank you for the visit and the comment, Kymm.
Thank you very much, Kir. 🙂
Thank you so much, Kathy.
The ending is especially lovely!
Beautiful!!!
oh Love. Such depth in your words.
Very poetic!
“Dubiety” and “froths of unresolved hopes” – I love your language in this piece.
This is beautiful, Archita. Very poetic.
“froths of unresolved hopes”–lovely
Moving, charming, romantic, passionate. Wonderful!
A vast ocean flowing with love and hand gains expression:)
You created the perfect atmosphere here 🙂
I love how this flows. So perfect and …writerly!
Lovely x
That intensity in the last part is so vivid. Wonderful imegary and choice of words to connect all dots.